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Living in the countryside is better than living in the city. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#countryside #city
Some
people
 hold the
believe
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 that it is better to accommodate in rural
areas
instead
 of urban
areas
.
Although
,
cities
 offer
lot
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 of benefits
such
 as
job
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jobs
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 and
education
;
however
, I believe that
,
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one
 can easily meet neat and clean environment at
countyside
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countryside
. I partially agree with both sides and will discuss my
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viewpoints
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view points
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viewpoints
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs. On the
one
 side, living in the urban side ,benefits are considerable.
Firstly
,
every
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one
 can easily get
job
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a job
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 in the
cities
 because most
of
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the
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industries are located
in
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over there, so job opportunities are more in the
cities
.
Secondly
,
people
 can easily
by
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buy
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things according to their requirements from stores , shops and malls, they do not need to go
at
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long
distance
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distances
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 to meet their needs .
Moreover
 ,
education
 centre's are
also
 in
cities
 so
one
 can get higher
education
 easily, while in the countryside
people
 face difficulty
to get
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education
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an education
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.
For instance
, a survey was conducted and seen that
people
 who
resides
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 in
cities
, their children got more marks as
compare
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 to rural children, due to coaching
centers
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. On the other side, life in rural
areas
 is more legitimate. Primarily,
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the environmental
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environmental
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environment
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 is free from pollution in
countryside
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the countryside
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 because there
is
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are
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 no industries and less traffic as compared to
cities
.
For instance
,
people
plants
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more trees because they have free land , which helps to maintain
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. Secondarily,
people
 have
lot
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a lot
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 of free time , they communicate with each other, which develops their good relationships with other ,
also
 it reduces their mental stress and they rarely suffered from depression. To justify it, it was seen that in rural
areas
people
 are more healthy as compared to urban masses. To conclude,
although
cities
 offer many facilities to their residents;
however
,
countryside
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the countryside
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 is
better
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a better
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place
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to place
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 to live it maintains physical and mental health
og
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of
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tranquil
  • serenity
  • bustling
  • amenities
  • prospects
  • healthier lifestyle
  • employment opportunities
  • cultural experiences
  • educational institutions
  • noise pollution
  • cost of living
  • crowded
  • infrastructure
  • urban sprawl
  • communal ties
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