Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promoting and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their product. What problem does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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Budget
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of big business firms
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upsurged rapidly for advertisement and other
promotion
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promotions
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for their
products
.
However
,
this
change made people pursue
such
products
more than ever.In
this
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will explain some of the problems of
this
trend and I will
also
explain why
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feel
government
endorsement is needed to built local supremacy. A major drawback of deceiving
advertisement
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advertisements
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is that
children
often get
aggrasive
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aggressive
and rude to their
parents
.Many companies around the world spent more money on promotion mainly targeting specific
audience
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audiences
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to inflate their sales.
Children
often watch these compelling
promotion
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promotions
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and urge their
parents
to buy
these
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this product
these products
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product
, while ,
parents
disagree with
it
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them
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because some of these
products
are not needed.
This
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views create conflicts between
parents
and
children
.
For instance
, a survey by
bbc
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BBC
Bbc
showed that 56%
percent
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per cent
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of
children
in The United Kingdom shop their commodities from advertisements. To tackle
this
issue
government
has to give more captivating offers and sales on their local
product
to establish local ubiquity.
For instance
, India is a great example of
this
.
Indian
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The Indian
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government
introduced their own
ecommerce
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eCommerce
e-commerce
platform to give much more affordable prices of their local
products
which will ultimately result in
greater
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economy
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boost.
Secondly
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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has to regulate
advertisement
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the advertisement
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of every
brands
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brand
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in their country. Some companies make dubious
ad
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ads
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without showing real facts and nutrition values of
products
.If
government
impose regulations real facts of a
product
will be shown to consumers
this
could possibly create
realisation
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a realisation
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of their shopping choices and deviating them to buy local
products
.A good illustration of
this
is Apple.Brazil sued Apple for misleading consumers by claiming their
products
are
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environmentally
friendly and not giving
charger
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chargers
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inside box create less paper , which was a lie because that was creating 20% more waste. After
this
event local smartphone firms sales risen drastically,
thus
,
government
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the government
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can make a huge difference. To conclude, misleading promotions are evidently influencing
children
.
Government
can overcome
this
issue by giving
affordibilty
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affordability
and true values of a
product
.
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