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Natural resources, such as water, forests and oil, are being used at an excessive rate. What are the causes of this problem? What are the possible solution to address this issue?

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Resources that can be found from the environment freely,
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 as lakes, trees, and crude oil, are being used at a massive speed. The main problem
this
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 cause is global warming and the most viable solution is to limit the uncontrolled usage of the resources by replacing those from renewable
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. The principal problem associated with the rapid usage is that the global warming issue. Global warming is increasing the atmospheric temperature. The result of
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 is ice-glaziers will be melted and we have to sacrifice lots of lands due to the increase of sea level.
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, 1 degree of Celsius temperature is increasing per year according to the latest news, the
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 were already forecasted that the Maldives will sink in the future due to the current rate of global warming. To tackle
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 issue, renewable
energy
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 should be used as
energy
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 in the future. Nowadays, solar
energy
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, wind
energy
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, geothermal
energy
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 are some of the renewable
energy
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sources
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 that can be easily converted to electricity. Why talking about electricity is because it is the highest quality
energy
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 source that can transfer from one place to another quickly as light. By using these kinds of
sources
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, we can highly reduce the consumption of oil and forests. As an example, Iceland, Norway, and some other sort of countries using 100% of solar
energy
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 to survive. In conclusion, the major issue is the higher consumption of natural
sources
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 which can result in global heating,
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, it can be addressed by replacing the natural
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 with renewable
energy
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