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Today we can see excessive consumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, oil and so on. The usage is increasing at a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimise the effects?

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Over the
last
 years, the
scarcity
 of natural
resources
 has become a vigorously discussed
issue
. The rapid growth of the world's population has led to excessive consumption of
water
, fossil fuels, oils, and the like.
This
 phenomenon is degrading the quality of life of many
people
 around the world. The following paragraphs will discuss the reasons for
this
issue
 in detail and propose remedial measures. The main reason for the
scarcity
 of natural
resources
 is the increase in population. Nearly 8 billion
people
 need to eat food and drink
water
.
People
 are
main
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 consumers of raw materials.
For example
, individuals consume oil, to drive their cars to work; forests, like furniture in their houses;
water
, to take showers and irrigate. Many underdeveloped and developing countries are already facing
the
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scarcity
 of
water
. Another reason for
resources
 depletion is industrialization. Manufacturers, willing to cater for the demand of more than 7 billion
people
, use fossil fuels as an energy source,
water
 and many more
resources
 depending on the industry.
However
,
this
issue
 can be defeated by taking potential actions.
First
 of all,
people
 should be educated about the threat of raw materials
scarcity
.
Incrased
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Increased
Increase
 public awareness can help to save
water
, oil, and fossil fuels.
For instance
,
people
 can take shorter showers, irrigate their plants more efficiently using modern technologies.
Secondly
, the government should encourage
people
 to buy environmentally friendly materials, to
recysle
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recycle
 and reuse everything.
People
 should understand that by going solar they can even save money on energy. To conclude, the depletion of natural
resources
 is a complex
issue
 with a host of factors. Starting from individual consumption to manufacturing.
Nonetheless
,
people
 and governments can put their best feet forward together to efficiently tackle
this
issue
.
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