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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#communications #it’s #letters
In the modern era, nobody
have
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tendency
tendancy
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 to write paper-based communicative skills. While technology has a big role
on
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 daily life, letters are losing their popularity. Technological developments are making everything easier,
the
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communiction
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communication
in particular
. On the one hand, some believe that using conventional communication ways will always be the best choice to express feelings or opinions. Because
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 they do not believe
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 power of technology and they use vintage solutions.
In addition
, it is not acceptable to delete important messages through devices.
For instance
,
although
 my mother has a cutting-edge mobile phone, she always writes letters to her neighbours to give some briefs about problems in the apartment. She thinks that writing texts or e-mails are not as effective as her letters.
On the other hand
, while some
people
 support the traditional communicative solutions to be in touch with others, a number of
people
 believe that the best way to express ideas is the technological solutions.
This
 is because
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 technological
gadges
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gadgets
 provide
people
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 what they need. The other vital point is saving more time while doing other important actions.
For example
, a friend of mine always chooses to write
e-mail
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 to her tutor about her master thesis and
this
 transaction takes only five
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.
Therefore
 she is able to continue to deal with other daily issues. Taking everything into consideration, using conventional ways to communicate with other
people
 is not common in
this
 age. In my opinion, technology is very effective and useful when we are aware of its benefits.
Hence
, we all need to adapt our lives
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 the modern era.
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