some people think that computer games are good for children's development other think it is bad discuss both the views and give your opinion

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computer
gaming is
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topic. Some individuals opine that
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growth of
children
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deemed that it has
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This
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However
, I side with
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view. To commence with, There are two main reasons why community believe in former view,
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nub is that due to
computer
games
, Not only
children
can learn typing skill with enjoyment but
also
some intense situations in
games
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to
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in positive ways
such
as focus, calmness and how to react in under pressure.
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reason is that nowadays lots of
games
are multiple player
games
so that an
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of people, as a repercussion, the maturity level increased via communication. To understand deeply, Some
computer
games
have a role, so in that
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player
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have
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to deal with some events,
this
thing can boot of
children
’s overall development. Altogether, these are some viable points which we can not keep away.
On the other hand
, those, who
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that
computer
game is bad for
children
, they
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following reasons,
first
and foremost is addiction, To understand
this
matter deeply Due to
computer
games
children
can not focus on academic, even though they spend time in limit because according to research, 85% of under 10 years
children
the neurology
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at that age, as a consequence, they can easily distract even a small amount of environment generate. Another point is that there are some
computer
games
which can
leads
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to psychological impacts on
children
such
as annoying, impatient and . so altogether these are some
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we can not ignore. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that,
Although
computer
games
plays
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a bit of role in
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of
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, some serious impact which leads to far away of
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and more negative impact generate, so I firmly disagree with
this
statement.
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