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Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Many are of the belief that the progress of
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 has widened income
inequality
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 between social classes. I agree with
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 view as,
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technology
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 ensures equal levels of accessibility, it
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 concentrates capital in the hands of a few. Detractors often argue that
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 has allowed the underprivileged greater access to information.
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 relates chiefly to information
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 and the growth of the internet and devices that support connectivity. In the past, only those
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 in universities could read certain academic articles and important research. The internet now makes it possible for the majority of the world’s population to locate a wide variety of information on every topic imaginable. The effect is a more equal playing field when it comes to education that
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 has a domino effect on later standards of living.
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, advances in
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 are paving the way for an increased
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 of capital by select individuals and corporations. In the past, an employee working a good job could generate most of their money from salary. Today, most income comes from reinvested capital.
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 has widened the gap between
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 classes and
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 only exacerbates
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 by replacing human jobs annually and hastening the growth of conglomerates like Google and Amazon. These companies, and their shareholders, are able to profit off existing capital while the average worker struggles to make ends meet or faces the prospect of unemployment due to technological innovation. In summary,
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 cuts down on some societal impediments to success but erects other,
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stronger
 economic barriers.
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 partially explains the recent calls for a universal basic income to combat growing inequality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advances in technology
  • gap between rich and poor
  • economic inequality
  • access to technology
  • competitive edge
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • impoverished areas
  • technological innovations
  • new job opportunities
  • internet connectivity
  • access to information
  • empower
  • educate
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • mobile banking
  • financial inclusion
  • education technology
  • equal learning opportunities
  • exacerbate
  • alleviate
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