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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of the school subjects. Other people think that international news as one of the school subjects. What do you think? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It was suggested by some people, that global
news
 should be added to the secondary school programme as one of the subjects, others argue that studying
news
 during some classes is enough. In my opinion, that some the international
news
 could be beneficial to read and study for children, both in academic and practical use. In
this
, case teachers have to educate their students to carefully choose what to read and critically judge data from the press.
Firstly
, understanding relevant global issues are very important for critical thinking and general vision.
For example
,
such
 topics as climate change, social and political researches, scientific breakthroughs can add valuable knowledge for a basic school programme. Many scientific, environmental magazines are actually very popular among teenage literature in my county.
Moreover
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 I think that elder children tend to be more interested in politics and social problems, as there are a rise in the number of young activists and politicians in recent years across the globe.
In addition
, I think that students should read and research
this
 information voluntarily because
this
 will motivate them more rather than obligated tasks with exercise, tests and rating. As an alternative, in secondary schools teachers could tasking students to present a relevant topic from international
news
 to profound their knowledge and create a habit of researching that will help them in
further
 education.
However
 fake or one-sided
news
 is more and more common nowadays,
therefore
 teachers have to navigate youngers how to receive and analyse data from the press, both from local and international
news
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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