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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The high-level degrees from universities and colleges help get high paying jobs, while others say that
experience
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 at
work
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 is the main reason for a well-paying job. I agree that
knowledge
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 of
work
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 will lead to increased pay jobs.
This
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 essay discusses points of both views. We know the importance of education in
this
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 21st century. If you want to get a job in any field, they
first
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 want to see your qualification. Your qualification describes the particular fields'
knowledge
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 and shows you're eligible for employment or not. Suppose you have a lot of theoretical
knowledge
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 and practical
knowledge
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. In that case, it's convenient to understand real-time
work
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 and efficiently
work
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 in an actual
work
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 environment, so here you're paid for your understanding.
Experience
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 is the only thing that helps you to solve any critical problems. Educations can't teach you how to handle real-time challenges, but with
experience
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, you can understand the actual situation, and you are capable of facing challenges. E.g.:- If I don't have any degree
of
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 coding, but with my
experience
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, I'll learn,
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 it's more effective than getting
knowledge
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 of coding, so here you earn with your
experience
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. In conclusion, I believe that some
experience
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 with high education is the best way to getting a high paying job in any field.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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