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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest

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These days
students
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 below seventeen years of age have to keep themselves academically focused in order to get into prestigious institutions for their undergraduate studies. Some people believe that all the
subjects
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 taught in the
school
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 should be studied with equal concentration while others feel that the
students
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 must devote their major part of the time on
subjects
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 that they would like to pursue in future or which would interest them. In
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students
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 these days are trained to handle a wide variety of
subjects
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 at schools.
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 aspect helps them to handle pressure and perform well in their academics. All
subjects
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 are equally important in terms of knowledge ,so
students
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 tend to learn the art of multi-tasking which would help them to pass the exam with flying colours.
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 :In order to get admitted to Cambridge University, candidates must have an aggregate of ninety-five per cent with English as their
first
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 language.
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 would help them assess the ability of a candidate to write and speak English. If the
students
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 have not performed well in English or have not opted for the subject at
school
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,
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 it would become impossible to get into
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 a renowned university.
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,there is a common belief that
students
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 out-perform only in those
subjects
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 for which they have a liking or that they would like to make it a career in future. In
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 some schools encourage
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 a kind of education , where they are entitled to choose courses that they wish to study.
This
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 process of learning would help them master the subject and do extremely well in it.
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,it would help them secure a place for themselves in the university that they wish to study. In conclusion,
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 it is a common thought that children should concentrate on all the
subjects
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 learnt in the
school
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 while some strata of the society feel that
school
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students
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 should dedicate more time on
subjects
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 that they consider their favourite.Personally.I think teenagers have a lot of capacity to learn ,store and retain things that they have learnt in
school
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 and so they should focus on all the
subjects
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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