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families have more people in the past because they have more children. Do you think there are more advantages than disadvantages to being in a large family in the past

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It is a social belief that there are more sons to inherit property so a number of families have more babies.
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of the above statement. On the one hand, in the large family, they will have all kinds of age group people. They grew up together so they can be learnt from the elder. If they are more siblings, they will know how to share with each other. In
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 day and age, the child can get spoiled if they have more privacy by unhealthy habits.
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, the recent study confirmed that the kids who are born and grew up in a large family in the past can live for a longer day than the youth in the present. In a large family, they support each other in hard situations.
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, in the past, they believed that having an additional boy means more number of earning money and they could live a good life. But
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 kind of thinking is harmful to the couple and their siblings. Nowadays, having a large number of families is incredibly difficult to manage in terms of education and in fulfilling their basic needs.
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, research has found that in a large family, the child of that family can not have the basic education and needs of a child. It will affect the development of teenagers so the child’s later life is very difficult. In conclusion, if families do not have a strong economy, they could not get more infants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agrarian
  • sustenance
  • communal bonds
  • emotional and practical support
  • child mortality rates
  • social security
  • financial burdens
  • economic strain
  • overpopulation
  • environmental degradation
  • inheritance
  • family business
  • internal family conflicts
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