Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, the biggest problem faced by
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. Some individuals hold the opinion that
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consequence of civil issues and deprivation;
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others think that it is the result of bad company. In
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essay, I will discuss both sides along with my opinion which will be highlighted in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one side,
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who claim that
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of social concerns and poverty because to complete basic needs,
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who are unable to
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the basic needs of their family,
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indulge in wrongdoing to earn money, so that they can buy food for
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family.
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, when a person committed a
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once after that society never gives them respect , and never give chance for improvement,
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, they enforced to doing wrong.
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to
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, unemployment is
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prominent social
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, if youngsters would have work , they do not provide attention to
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and always stays away from
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. On the other side and according to
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, some
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think that
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crime
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rate is the influence of bad
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company.
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, if a person
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friend circle who indulge in
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, they
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encourage them to commit a
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. To justify it, a recent study has been shown that 70%
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people
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following the habits of their peer group.
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,
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became
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, they most of time in office and their watch violent episodes in their
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and
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try it in their life, so it can be
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the influence
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of media. To conclude,
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society responsible for enforcing
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for misdoing,
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a person
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influencing by their company in which they spend most of
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