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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Pie chart illustrates the division of population
overall
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 with the spending and usage of the resources with respect to different countries of the world.
Overall
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 the resources are consumed majorly in USA and
Europe
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 compared to other countries. Meanwhile, Asia is the most populated country
lead
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led
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 by
Europe
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,Asia and others.
Furthermore
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, most of the countries spend on other things followed by food, transport, housing and the least is spent on clothing. In terms of Spending, people tend to buy other things more with 40% as opposed to food, transport,housing and clothing with 24,18,12 and 6% respectively.
While
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 the consumption of resources is drastically high in USA and
Europe
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 with 60% in total compared to 40%
others
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in others
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.
On the other hand
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, Asia accounted for the highest number of the
world
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world's
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 population with 57%
In contrast
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 to
Europe
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 and America with 14% ,slightly more than Africa which is 10% and others accounted for only 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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