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‘For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

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Nowadays,there are many art subjects classes like painting,
music
 and cinema.There are
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 main visions
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about
 it,some people believe that art subject like playing an
instrument
 is essential for students to learn,the priority of
this
 talent is the same as other abilities like reading and writing.I moderately agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss why playing an
instrument
 is essential for all children. On one hand,playing an
instrument
 expands children's
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horizons
horizon
.Briefly,while children do some practical activities like playing
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,they
finding
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 themselves and their interests,they can think
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 to box.Importantly,some kids
captivated
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 by playing any
instrument
,so they start learning the specific
instrument
 which they like the most.Hopefully, in
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future
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 they'll
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 in their way and they'll
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receive
large
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 amount of money from their activity like many famous
musicans
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musicians
.
For example
,Bakh who was a famous
violonist
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violinist
 wrote in his book that he started playing
violin
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the violin
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 from an early age,that time he
had'
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hadn't
had
t
 enough money to
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 to
music
 class and he learnt from his
grandparet
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grandparents
grandparent
.He had many live concerts and became rich,
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consequently
 Bakh academy created by him when he was in his middle ages.
On the other hand
,it's undeniable that
wriding
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writing
riding
 and writing are
importent
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important
 for all pupils, actually without reading they can'
t
 learn
music
 and without writing ability they can'
t
 write any lyrics.I believe that schools must
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 into consideration that put some
music
 classes in student's
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schedule
 because sometimes
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students
 feel bored and annoyed when only studying
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theoretical
 subjects. To conclude,In my view-point,reading and writing are really important for students,
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moreover
,
music
 and playing an
instrument
 is important too.According to what I said above,playing an
instrument
 as a hobby is great and has many benefits but there isn'
t
 more important than basic abilities like reading and writing.
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