‘For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

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Nowadays,there are many art subjects classes like painting,

music

and cinema.There are

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main visions

abput

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about

it,some people believe that art subject like playing an

instrument

is essential for students to learn,the priority of

this

talent is the same as other abilities like reading and writing.I moderately agree with

this

statement and

this

essay will discuss why playing an

instrument

is essential for all children. On one hand,playing an

instrument

expands children's

horizone

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horizons

horizon

.Briefly,while children do some practical activities like playing

piano

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,they

finding

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themselves and their interests,they can think

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to box.Importantly,some kids

captivated

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by playing any

instrument

,so they start learning the specific

instrument

which they like the most.Hopefully, in

near

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future

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they'll

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in their way and they'll

recieve

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receive

large

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amount of money from their activity like many famous

musicans

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musicians

For example

,Bakh who was a famous

violonist

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violinist

wrote in his book that he started playing

violin

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the violin

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from an early age,that time he

had'

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hadn't

had

enough money to

going

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music

class and he learnt from his

grandparet

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grandparents

grandparent

.He had many live concerts and became rich,

consequencly

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consequently

Bakh academy created by him when he was in his middle ages.

On the other hand

,it's undeniable that

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writing

riding

and writing are

importent

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important

for all pupils, actually without reading they can'

learn

music

and without writing ability they can'

write any lyrics.I believe that schools must

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into consideration that put some

music

classes in student's

schule

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schedule

because sometimes

studdents

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students

feel bored and annoyed when only studying

theorical

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theoretical

subjects. To conclude,In my view-point,reading and writing are really important for students,

morever

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moreover

music

and playing an

instrument

is important too.According to what I said above,playing an

instrument

as a hobby is great and has many benefits but there isn'

more important than basic abilities like reading and writing.

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‘For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

Fully explain your ideas

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