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In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development that occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

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Disappearing traditional
languages
 is
one
 of the most common issues around the world.
Although
, losing a significant part of the traditional custom is regretful but it is necessary to get along with revolution and globalization for youngsters. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both ideas. On the
one
 hand, It can be said that protecting indigenous
languages
 is crucial to ensure the protection of the cultural identity and dignity of indigenous
people
 and safeguard their traditional heritage. Nowadays, young
people
 are lost interest in using traditional
languages
thus
 governments have been attempting to find ways to encourage them to use traditional language.
For example
, the French government is
one
 of the leading protectors of the traditional language, considering French continues to be
one
 of the fifteen widely used
languages
. The French government have been stipulating that any sign containing
English
 posted by a business must
also
 post the same text in French in letters at least twice the size of the
English
 text. Nowadays, it seems that
people
 tend to learn the most used foreign
languages
such
 as
English
 because
people
 can get more information in that language compared to indigenous
languages
. Most of the books that contain valuable information are written in
English
.
In addition
, learning indigenous
languages
 can be hard and invaluable for younger
people
 due to Some workplaces are required to employ young
people
 who can speak other
languages
such
 as
English
, Chinese. Knowing that
languages
 can bring opportunities to younger
people
 because they are valued more than others and get more job promotions. In conclusion, it appears that along with technological and other development traditional
languages
 might get forgotten.
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