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Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. Do you agree or disagree?

#schools #time #subjects #history #people #skills #students #job
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Schools are teaching various
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subjects
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mathtematic
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mathematics
mathematic
,science,history,art and language, all of
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this
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are
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 necessary
in
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school
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 and university.
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, institutions should spend
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to teach
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 them to learn
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a skill
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skill
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skills
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 that might
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 in the future. In
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 of
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 statement.
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school
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a lot
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 that only important
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 area but not important in
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competitive
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Teacher
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 should
spending
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 more
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to
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teaching
there
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pupil
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a subject
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subject
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 that
help
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 them in the future or
teach
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 them what they want to be.
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, if
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want
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 to be designer
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shoul
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should
 teach them the pathway to be
designer
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designers
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such
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 as teach them about art
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subject
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subjects
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 or design and let them
practice
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 more than learning in theory.
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,
study
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a study
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 in
subjects
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 that they want to learn
are
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 more effective than
learn
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various
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subject
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unnecsessary
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unnecessary
.
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, in the
modern day
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,
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such
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 as history or traditional
subjects
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 are not important nowadays. Because these
subject
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 children can learn by themself.
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, children learn
alot
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a lot
lot
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thing
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things
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 from
internet
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the internet
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teacher
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teachers
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unable
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are unable
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 to teach them in
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school
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such
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 as sex or even
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.
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a pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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 can learn
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everything
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every thing
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 that
school
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able
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 to teach them by themself like traditional and history
subjects
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.
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,
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the student
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student
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students
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 should spend
time
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 at
school
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 with friends that might help them to learn about to be social people and spend
time
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 at
school
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 to take action about they interesting or even
practice
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.
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 spending
time
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school
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 and
practice
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 is more effective than
prepare
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 to take an exam
in
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each semester. In conclusion, learning about skill or
practice
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 at
school
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teacher
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 advice is more effective than learning in the same way in the past.
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