Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. Do you agree or disagree?

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them to learn
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teaching
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them in the future or
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them what they want to be.
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to be designer
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teach them the pathway to be
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such
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or design and let them
practice
more than learning in theory.
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in
subjects
that they want to learn
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more effective than
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various
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subject
that
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unnecessary
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, in the
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,
subjects
such
as history or traditional
subjects
are not important nowadays. Because these
subject
children can learn by themself.
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, children learn
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from
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to teach them in
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such
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can learn
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every thing
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that
school
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to teach them by themself like traditional and history
subjects
.
Thirdly
,
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student
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should spend
time
at
school
with friends that might help them to learn about to be social people and spend
time
at
school
to take action about they interesting or even
practice
.
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spending
time
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and
practice
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to take an exam
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each semester. In conclusion, learning about skill or
practice
at
school
in
teacher
advice is more effective than learning in the same way in the past.
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