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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #cars #travel #city #bicycle
Some
people
 hold the
believe
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 that
traveling
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travelling
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 is good by cars, whereas, others consider that
two
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two-wheeler
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wheeler
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wheelers
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 is
good
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a good
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 option. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss, both sides in the forthcoming paragraphs. I agree with the
later
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latter
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 view. On the one side,
people
 who think that priority should be given to automobiles because it is more convenient to travel by car, owing to fast speed one can easily reach on their destination. It is
also
time saving
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 method.
Moreover
, if
whole
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the whole
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 family wants to go together, they can easily go by car which is not possible and have great fun, can spend Quality time , which is not possible by pedal cycle.
Also
, when there is
old
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 age member in the house, they can easily take them
in
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to
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hospital
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the hospital
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, in case of emergency, no need to wait for
ambulance
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the ambulance
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 and
also
 can save life easily. On the opposite side and in my opinion,
use
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the use
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 of
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 is eco friendly. It does not produce any kind of pollution, so it protects
environment
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the environment
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.
Also
, it helps to maintain physical health, as it
act
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acts
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 as
an exercise equipment
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exercise equipment
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. To justify it, a recent has been shown that, 50%
people
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of people
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 doing regular cycling to reduce their weight.
In addition
 to
this
,
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the
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pedal cycle is cheaper as compare to motors, poor
people
 can
also
 afford it. To conclude,
although
, motor vehicle
are
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is
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 more convenient and
time saving
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time-saving
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 method for
traveling
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travelling
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;
however
, I believe that pushbikes
helps
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help
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 to maintain physical fitness as well as to maintain
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
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