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With the development of online media, there is no future for the radio. To what extent do you agree?

#development #media #future #radio
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The widespread
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 of
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Internet
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-based media might become a reason
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radio’s
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radios
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 dying. I agree that nowadays
radio
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 is not so popular as in the past, but I think that it will not disappear altogether. The
radio
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 change and absorb new technology
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 to satisfy
needs
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the needs
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 of listeners.
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,
radio
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 can be critical in emergencies. In the modern world, almost all technological processes exploit the
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,
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however
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 it
is not means
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 that society is not needed the
radio
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.
Radio
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 stations continue their work and create new content for
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generation
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. It remains one of the main sources of information which available for everyone, not to mention that
radio
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 meets needs related to entertainment and education.
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is BBC
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, which informs, educates and amuses people all over the world. They broadcast their programs through different streaming
aps
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apps
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 which
popular
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 among people. Despite
popularity
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the popularity
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 of the
Internet
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,
radio
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 is
more
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a more
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 reliable technology. In
dangerous
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a dangerous
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situation
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situations
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such
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 as
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an earthquake
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earthquake
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earthquakes
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 or
other disaster
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 when access to the
internet
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 was not available,
radio
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 was the only
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approach to get vital information.
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, in
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developing countries
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 is being more popular than the
internet
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 for poor people and it
remain
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 significant to getting
news
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the news
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. In conclusion, I think that it is too early
claim
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 the
radio
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 is irrelevant for the modern world. The main reason why
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 happens is
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 retains positions in the media and continues to cater for needs and preferences.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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