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With the development of online media, there is no future for the radio. To what extent do you agree?

#development #media #future #radio
The widespread
using
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 of
the
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Internet
-based media might become a reason
of
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radio’s
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radios
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 dying. I agree that nowadays
radio
 is not so popular as in the past, but I think that it will not disappear altogether. The
radio
 change and absorb new technology
try
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 to satisfy
needs
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the needs
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 of listeners.
In addition
,
radio
 can be critical in emergencies. In the modern world, almost all technological processes exploit the
internet
,
however
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 it
is not means
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 that society is not needed the
radio
.
Radio
 stations continue their work and create new content for
new
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generation
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. It remains one of the main sources of information which available for everyone, not to mention that
radio
 meets needs related to entertainment and education.
Good
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 and famous example
it
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is BBC
Radio
, which informs, educates and amuses people all over the world. They broadcast their programs through different streaming
aps
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apps
app
 which
popular
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are popular
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 among people. Despite
popularity
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the popularity
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 of the
Internet
,
radio
 is
more
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a more
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 reliable technology. In
dangerous
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a dangerous
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situation
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situations
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such
 as
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an earthquake
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earthquake
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earthquakes
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 or
other disaster
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another disaster
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 when access to the
internet
 was not available,
radio
 was the only
one
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approach to get vital information.
In addition
, in
the
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developing countries
radio
 is being more popular than the
internet
 for poor people and it
remain
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 significant to getting
news
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the news
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. In conclusion, I think that it is too early
claim
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 the
radio
 is irrelevant for the modern world. The main reason why
this
 happens is
radio
 retains positions in the media and continues to cater for needs and preferences.
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