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Many people depend on cars in their day-to-day life (for example, to drive to work). However, unrestricted car use has led to a number of problems. What are these problems? Should individuals be discouraged from using cars in order to reduce them?

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 have been playing the predominant role in transportation .the majority of folk can not avoid jeep in their daily travelling purpose,which leads to several
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 and the possible avenue to discourage
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. On the one hand,there are plenty of problems caused by cars .
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 have been emitting carbon dioxide ,which would create a myriad of environmental
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 horns in the car creates sound pollution as well.For evidence,a survey conducted one of the major cities indicate 60 % of pollution caused by vehicle especially from truck because more
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 use their personal vans for travelling ,
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 ,the numbers of van been increasing day by day.
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,accidents and traffic jams have been increasing .The number of cars on road have increased so that many
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 lost their life by accidents and government has to face the problems of traffic concern.
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 should discourage from driving cars
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 of reducing them.Government should implement regulations and taxes for individuals, who use station
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 to travel nearest locations.
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, one of the Indian states has implemented a new act to reduce jeep and promoting public transportation to reduce traffic
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,promote the importance of cycling and walking to the public and authorities should arrange awareness classes for
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 to help them understand the importance of these. To conclude, the usage of
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 been created a myriad of
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,authorities should take necessary acts to reduce these obstacles.it is predicting in future,the problem caused by convertible will curtail.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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