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Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The pre-processed
food
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 industry has become an area of contention in many countries. Most of them have
preservatives
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 and additives in their contents.
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 these chemicals extend the shelf life and make the
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 appealing to consumers, they pose a serious threat to public health. I personally believe that producers should be restricted from adding synthetic ingredients into nourishment. Adding
preservatives
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 into the
food
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 we eat can help to keep it fresh for a long. These chemicals usually contain acids or sugar that kill bacterias and fungus,
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, preventing them from spoiling.
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, bread does not get mouldy, fruits stay fresh along with other products that stay unspoiled, all thanks to
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.
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 helps to alleviate the problem of hunger. Because without
preservatives
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, a lot of
food
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 would be wasted. Another synthetic additive, sodium nitrate helps to make foodstuff more appealing for customers.
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, ham and other meat products get a nice, aesthetic pink colour after adding sodium nitrate.
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, all these ingredients are hazardous for human being's health and cause the development of diseases like cancer, obesity, diabetes, allergy and the like. Additives are scientifically produced in laboratories, to mainly boost the company sales. Unfortunately, processed
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 manufacturers' primary goal is getting more revenue rather than caring for the end customer's health.
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, sodium nitrate is proven to develop cancer cells in the human body.
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, foodstuff producers keep injecting it into ham only because it helps to maintain its pink colour. To conclude, I personally believe that synthetic ingredients in processed
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 lead to grievous consequences in the long term. They cause cancer and other diseases.
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