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You would like to join the local orchestra Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: • Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice • Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate • Express your enthusiasm for music

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding joining
in
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your Orchestra
that is
 famous in my area. My name is Namita lives in Bellandur and know how to play
piano
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. I am musically inclined and have been working in JBL Orchestra since 2018 as a
piano
 artist.
Beside
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that
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 I manage all musical concerts which are organised in JBL Orchestra. Before
that
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 I was working in a club which had 6 members only. For better future prospect graduated in music.
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, got
specialization
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 in
piano
 and completed
one year
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 diploma in
Piano
 from Florida University.
Moreover
, in
free
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 time learn new tunes and try to gain more knowledge in music. That’s why I attend many musical functions. I have been learning different kinds of
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instrument
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 since 7 years of my age. I was
active
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 participant in school and won many prizes at
district
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the district
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 and state
level
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levels
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 in
piano
. Kindly acknowledge my credential and looking forward to your response.
Your
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 Sincerely, Namita Ranjan
Submitted by namita.sinha25 on

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Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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