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Traditions are about the past and technology about the future and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for that sake of the progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this.

#traditions #technology #future #sake #progress
From the past decades, there is a lot of development in terms of
technology
. There were a huge number of inventions that happened and many scientific discoveries took place.
Although
, there is more and more future scope for the improvement of
Technology
. I would definitely say that
technology
 will be much more utilised in the future.
Traditions
 come from some thousands of years and there are people who respect these
traditions
 and honour them. There are various kinds of beliefs and cultures in
traditions
 from various parts of the world. And all of them had a story behind them. Some of them might be logical and a few of them aren'
t
. But some people are very much adapted to these and never let them go. The arguments on forgetting these
traditions
 to have a better growth of
technology
 have been happening for some time now. And there might be a reason for that too. Some humans are so immersed in their
traditions
 and don'
t
 see a point in using and contributing to
technology
 development.
For example
, a farmer believes in cultivating his crop using manpower because that's the way it happened in his family for years. But there is so much machinery that can be used in his farm which could double his yield. I wouldn'
t
 say these
traditions
 need to be put aside completely and people should move to the future. But they should understand the differences and live in the present. Holding on to
traditions
 that were formed some centuries ago won'
t
 be of any use. Everybody should take a step forward and look at the bright side of
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progress
  • traditional
  • heritage
  • identity
  • belonging
  • innovation
  • advancement
  • holistic
  • development
  • adaptation
  • modernization
  • balance
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