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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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 has increased tremendously
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 the past decade. People of all ages utilize the
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 service for multiple purposes including but not limited to education, social networking, online shopping, research, entertainment and so on. While
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 is definitely a boon, there are some people who say that its
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 for educational purposes must be restricted as
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 heavily rely on it and pay less attention to the one on one lectures. In my opinion, the
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 outweighs the negative effects.
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 is a vast repository of unlimited information. It helps
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 technology and innovations. These days the technology is rapidly changing and it is not feasible to have everything updated on paper swiftly. Even if the
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 their classes, they will be able to speed up their learning with the help of the resources available
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 in no time and be
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 affordable and it can be used on the go more feasibly
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books. While
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 has many advantages , spending more time on it can cause damage to the health and the
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social networking and entertainment websites which leads to a decrease in overall productivity.
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negative impacts. To conclude,
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 should not be restricted for educational purposes as it provides more value to the
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 and can help them stay up to date with the latest material and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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