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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed that in today's world most individuals visit
differrent
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different
countries
 for leisure. Many societies consider that
this
 can have a detrimental effect on the host
countries
. I agree with the given statements and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
next
 few paragraphs. On the one hand, travelling to foreign
countries
 provide an opportunity to explore different culture and lifestyle of people during the entire trip especially when a person is living in a bubble and he
want
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 to gain insight of the outside world.
Although
 moving abroad has become expensive in the present era but many communities still prefer to spend their vacation outside.
For instance
, many
nationalist
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 visit other
countries
 to educate their
off springs
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offsprings
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 about different world heritage sites and traditions. In short, going abroad is an ideal way to meet new people and learn more
diversity
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.
On the other hand
, international tourism
create
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 pollution. It is a
well known
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 fact that foreigners litter garbage and contaminate the local environment when they go out for
a
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apply
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sightseeing
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sight seeing
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 as they find it hard to find the trash cans.
However
, the authorities must levy the green tax on the foreign residents coming to visit as a tourist. . A good example of
this
 can be seen in Maldives where 20 USD is charged from the outside visitors.
Therefore
,
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the inflow
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 of
interntational
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international
 tourist significantly
contribute
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 in the pollution and contamination of the host country. In conclusion,
international
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 tour is considered an ideal way of
gaing
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gaining
gaming
going
 pleasure and education if the time is spent wisely. And outsiders are a threat to the natural
environmnet
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environment
 if they do not adopt eco-friendly methods during
they
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 stay in the other country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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