some people believe that radio is the best ways to get news while other believe that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples?

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two ways
television
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news
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radio
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disagree with it and they deemed that
television
is
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side with
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view. To commence with, There are some
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those who believe that
radio
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option
to know around what is happing.
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reason is that we can carry the
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any place, any time with
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radio
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due to that extra
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cost is almost negligible.Another nub is that the
radio
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, it has not only required any
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tv
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large space. Altogether these are the
reasons
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.
On the other hand
, it is believed by crowed that
television
is the optimum
option
for
news
, they give following
reasons
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foremost
for most
,
television
has a plethora of advantage
such
as it gives information through
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video
and audio,
radio
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amount of channel whereas
tv
gives global
news
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and
information.
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this
contemporary era is
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the era
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of multimedia generation so that people prefer
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video
over only audio.
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a survey
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taken by
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company is
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that 80% of under 40 years
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prefer
tv
over
radio
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. these are viable
reasons
we can not be ignored. In recapitulation,
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would like to reiterate that
although
radio
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a wide range of benefits
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the advantage
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of
television
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many to be
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ignored
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am concerned
television
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option
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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