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Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is been over a decade that has had an argument about is it
life
 now is better than 100 years ago.
Although
, it is undeniable that many
people
 seem to like what we living in the past due to the cultures and societies in that period.
However
, time change everything has changed many have
completely
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 different from the previous 100 years. The following paragraph will be discussed about my perspective on
this
 argument.
Therefore
, the conclusion has been reached. From my point of view, I quite agree with the statement because in
this
 modern
era
, technology
have
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 been improved over time and it is made our
life
 better than before, for
an
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example mobile
phone
 if we compare mobile phones in the
last
era
, we will see that in present-
dayday
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day day
day-day
 mobile
phone
 play
an
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 crucial role in our daily
life
 in many ways
such
 as many
people
 in
this
era
 prefer the mobile
phone
 to check news over getting newspaper either how we contact other like in present-
dayday
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day day
day-day
 we just
phone
 called them but for the previous
era
 we used the letter to be the main thing to make contact the other.
Moreover
, not only for
technological
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 side but
also
 it's changed in the societies. For
an
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example, some of the cultures have been developed for the modern-
dayday
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day day
day-day
 to make it more suitable for the
people
 in
this
 period, and it makes varieties of culture to be interested in other
people
 to come and studies about how it changes over the times. In summary, I strongly agree with the statement that
life
 is now better than 100 years ago, due to the fact that humans always want to improve their
life
 to be easier than before.
Also
 about the
,
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cultures
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 it makes the culture more interesting in the
modern day
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 and
also
make
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 us want to go back and observes the original one.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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