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Band 5

Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is been over a decade that has had an argument about is it
life
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 now is better than 100 years ago.
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, it is undeniable that many
people
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 seem to like what we living in the past due to the cultures and societies in that period.
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, time change everything has changed many have
completely
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 different from the previous 100 years. The following paragraph will be discussed about my perspective on
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 argument.
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, the conclusion has been reached. From my point of view, I quite agree with the statement because in
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 modern
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, technology
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 been improved over time and it is made our
life
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 better than before, for
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example mobile
phone
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 if we compare mobile phones in the
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era
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, we will see that in present-
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day day
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 mobile
phone
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 play
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 crucial role in our daily
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 in many ways
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 as many
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 in
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era
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 prefer the mobile
phone
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 to check news over getting newspaper either how we contact other like in present-
dayday
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day day
day-day
 we just
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 called them but for the previous
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 we used the letter to be the main thing to make contact the other.
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, not only for
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 it's changed in the societies. For
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example, some of the cultures have been developed for the modern-
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day day
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 in
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 period, and it makes varieties of culture to be interested in other
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 to come and studies about how it changes over the times. In summary, I strongly agree with the statement that
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 is now better than 100 years ago, due to the fact that humans always want to improve their
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 to be easier than before.
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cultures
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 it makes the culture more interesting in the
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make
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 us want to go back and observes the original one.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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