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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Asian
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 countries, not only in Britain but many
Europe
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 nations, old people are taking
care
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 nursing homes. In my opinion, it is
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 right thing that government should pay the fees for
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First
 of all, Britain has a high tax rate that citizens have to pay. It takes part in the unemployment, retirement, and medical insurance to take
care
 of themselves when they get older. By
this
, they work hard and earn their own credit to
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care
 of later, lift up the responsibility for their children. It is
also
 a good plan for youngsters to work hard to get ready for their future. The government just plays the part to distribute the investment when taking the tax, and give back to them when they are aged.
Secondly
, British does not have the big-family culture to share the house within 3 generations like
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. By that, it is hard for them to give
care
 to their parents or grandparents.
In addition
, nurses have better skills to give elders treatments when they
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. So that it will be more comfortable for all.
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, in Vietnam, grandparents stay with the family to take
care
 of their grandchild while their parents are at work. They might not have enough time to rest
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 and think about themselves even when they had worked for
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 whole life. In conclusion, it is fair for elders to fully rest and have a good retirement after several years of working. They should be taking
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 anyone, including the government.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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