Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
It is considered by many that
posessing
excess wealth and less Correct your spelling
possessing
time
is much better. While there are others who think that having more spare Use synonyms
time
and little monetary Use synonyms
resource
is good. In Fix the agreement mistake
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this
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I will look at both sides of the Add a comma
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arguments
and give my opinion.
On the one hand, more money can raise the standard of living. It is a Fix the agreement mistake
argument
well known
fact that people who earn Add a hyphen
well-known
big
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a big
salary
have Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
better
lifestyle for their children and can lead a healthy Add an article
a better
life
during their retirement especially when there is no one to look after them and Use synonyms
also
they can prosper in Linking Words
life
soon. Use synonyms
Although
financial stability is an integral part of every human being money should be spent wisely. Linking Words
For instance
, business entrepreneurs are financially sound in developed economies due to long working hours. In short, wealthy communities give more weightage to income as compared to Linking Words
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time
and they enjoy Add an article
the time
the
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apply
life
in an ideal way.
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On the other hand
, more free Linking Words
time
can facilitate good social Use synonyms
bondings
in the country. It is often observed that societies with Fix the agreement mistake
bonding
high
level of social networks are good at dealing Add an article
a high
the high
social
issues in Change preposition
with social
life
at a later stage primarily when there is a lot of Use synonyms
anti social
activities happening in the given territory. A good example of Add a hyphen
anti-social
this
can be seen in Nepal where many small social groups play an important role in strengthening the culture and Linking Words
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brotherhood
brother hood
.
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brotherhood
Finally
, in my Linking Words
opinion
group of people with more finance gain a better reputation in the world and at the same Add the comma(s)
,opinion
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time
individuals with more Add a comma
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time
in hands are better in making the society evil free due to their strong brotherhood.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite