Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

It is considered by many that
posessing
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possessing
excess wealth and less
time
is much better. While there are others who think that having more spare
time
and little monetary
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is good. In
this
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I will look at both sides of the
arguments
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and give my opinion. On the one hand, more money can raise the standard of living. It is a
well known
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fact that people who earn
big
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salary
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salaries
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have
better
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lifestyle for their children and can lead a healthy
life
during their retirement especially when there is no one to look after them and
also
they can prosper in
life
soon.
Although
financial stability is an integral part of every human being money should be spent wisely.
For instance
, business entrepreneurs are financially sound in developed economies due to long working hours. In short, wealthy communities give more weightage to income as compared to
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and they enjoy
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life
in an ideal way.
On the other hand
, more free
time
can facilitate good social
bondings
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in the country. It is often observed that societies with
high
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level of social networks are good at dealing
social
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issues in
life
at a later stage primarily when there is a lot of
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activities happening in the given territory. A good example of
this
can be seen in Nepal where many small social groups play an important role in strengthening the culture and
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brother hood
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.
Finally
, in my
opinion
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group of people with more finance gain a better reputation in the world and at the same
time
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individuals with more
time
in hands are better in making the society evil free due to their strong brotherhood.
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