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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by many that it is good to have friends with similar thoughts. while there are others who think that it is fine to have peers
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manytimes
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 have
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disagreement
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 with them. I will look at both sides of the argument and give my opinion. On the one hand, individuals look for
like minded
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people
. It is a well-known fact that majority of the
people
 praise a person when he or she supports his or her ideas and perspectives in
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 same situation as it gives a person a sense of
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contentment
 and
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 his ego.
For instance
, many
people
 while
traveling
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 look for
people
 who share
same
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 experience of going out due to the fact that
people
 want to feel comfortable and are afraid of taking any risk. In short,
people
 do not wish to leave their comfort level and want to feel safe where ever they go.
On the other hand
,
differnt
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different
 minded
people
 can be an ideal source to learn from. Needless to say that communities have
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set
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 of thoughts when faced with the same situation due to the fact that many individuals have various past experiences. It is a good opportunity for societies to know their perceptions. To illustrate,
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heterogenous
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 of
people
 are more mature and can understand
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empathy.
Therefore
,
people
 with
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background
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 can be a boom for a society and culture.
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, in my
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 selecting a friend of
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 nature give confidence to another human being due to
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same
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 pattern of behaviour while living with
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a person
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 of odd nature can broaden the horizon of
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 and would make societies
broad minded
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. In conclusion,
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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