Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
The singular verb keeps does not appear to agree with the plural subject people. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.
The noun phrase cost seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The word healthy doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.
The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
The word healthy doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.