In many countries, people now wear western-style dress such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Currently, in most parts of the world, westernized clothing is the preferred choice of many individuals compared to traditional attire.

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essay will discuss how the inevitable globalisation contributes to the issue and how I personally believe that the trend has a detrimental effect

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the appreciation of various cultures.

To begin

with, the reason why people adapt outfits of the western

culture

is globalisation.

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means

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clothing items

such

as jeans and suits are gaining popularity in various places around the world.

Moreover

, fashion brands have brought greater attention to

this

style by utilising the media

such

as magazines.

Moreover

, the frequent occurrence of

this

style has led people to believe that the western influence is superior to the traditional. Eventually,

this

leads to the shift of the public’s attention from locally ethnic apparel to

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western counterparts. From a personal point of view,

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phenomenon is a destructive development towards

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appreciation of the community itself. Local

culture

and beliefs that are well represented in traditional outfits may lose their value

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.

This

may happen when people ignore the importance of wearing certain

tradional

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traditional

costumes. As an illustration, Koreans used to wear multiple-layered-and-colourful traditional attire called Hanbok on New Year’s Eve, believing the bright colours and layers bring massive good luck to the year ahead. Nowadays, Koreans prefer to wear fancy and expensive items like

jewelries

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and branded goods on New Year’s celebration to show off their wealth among their friends and family.

Hence

, the

culture

represented by the traditional costume has lost its value in the community. In conclusion, a majority of the society

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shifted to wear clothing influenced by the western

culture

,

instead

of their own.

This

trend happened inevitably as globalisation plays a big role in promoting the western style to the general population. Unfortunately, I believe

this

development

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as it may cause the loss of deeper values and cultural beliefs that traditional costumes may exhibit.