Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

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Today
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has a pivotal role for human beings and it is measured in the terms of
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,others believe that the
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's
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or failure cannot compare with
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. In my opinion,
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depends upon the compassion, and dedication of the individual's work. Humans are more intense in earning more
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.
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,
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has a prominent place in satisfying the desires and needs which are related
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every
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's life.
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,even youngsters and teenagers are discontinuing studies in educational institutions and want to spend the time earning
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,young people are working part-time positions in restaurants and stopping their education in the middle as they are interested in
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, parents are
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encouraging their children in working at the age of 16 and under, because of the financial impact of spending the
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on colleges. A
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's
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depends upon the profession they choose and the interest of choice in goal setting
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,businessmen profit can be calculated according to the capital of the company.
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, highly efficient skilled workers
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as
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doctors and lawyers are busy with their schedules.
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, their calculated hours are always measured in the terms of
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, doctors and lawyers are highly qualified professional which earns highest salary and profits and completely depends upon the how they handle the case.
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, people who are succeeded are compassionate about their work and knowledge and always do hard work.
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, they never give up and always be strong and more dedicated to whatever skills they are interested
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In conclusion,I believe that prosperity depends on the different perspectives of the people and situations they are facing in life.
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,
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to be succeeded in our life but if we have enough
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we achieve our goal the
person
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can be more wealthiest and gained.
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