IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

In most countries, there is an age limit at which people are permitted to drive, but no age limit for drivers. Some experts have proposed that drivers be aged between 20 to 70. Why they have proposed that? What are the drawbacks of this proposal?

#countries #age #limit #people #drive #drivers #experts
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is clear that in modern life a lot of countries have an
age
Use synonyms
 limitation for
drivers
Use synonyms
 licence and have no
such
Linking Words
 restrictions for driving. Some people think that it is false and the driver's
age
Use synonyms
 should be between 20 and 70, but others disagree. I support the
second
Linking Words
 opinion. Like all things in the world,
this
Linking Words
 one has a positive and negative side. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I will describe the drawbacks of
this
Linking Words
 proposal, but
also
Linking Words
 I should say about the advantages. The most important effect of the fact that
drivers
Use synonyms
 do not have an
age
Use synonyms
 limit is the proficiency of
drivers
Use synonyms
. It is clear that children's ability to study and their memory is better than adults.
For example
Linking Words
, if a boy or a girl likes mechanics, cars and different types of machines,
this
Linking Words
 child, naturally, would be interested in driving from his or her childhood.
However
Linking Words
, of course, it should be a child with the
age
Use synonyms
 of 14.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, there are a lot of disadvantages to
this
Linking Words
 proposal.
Firstly
Linking Words
, a person before 20 has not developed psychologically for
such
Linking Words
 activity. It may seem funny and easy but driving is a big stress for the human organism. The
car
Use synonyms
's driving requires a huge amount of concentration and attention. Whereas children do not have
such
Linking Words
 internals. The psychologist Andrew Stavrinskiy said that teenagers may seem to be adults, but they are mentally immature. And it can cause for their mental health. The
second
Linking Words
 disadvantage of the point that there is not a limitation for the
age
Use synonyms
 of
drivers
Use synonyms
 is the growing number of
car
Use synonyms
 accidents. As I wrote before, children are not mentally developed for
this
Linking Words
 activity, the same situation is occur with people under 70. They can lose control and make
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
car
Use synonyms
accidents
Correct the article-noun agreement
accident
show examples
.
For example
Linking Words
, the statistics of
car
Use synonyms
 accidents in Iowa shows, that 20 per cent of all crashes were committed by people
age
Use synonyms
 17 and 75.
Submitted by ktpchkv on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: