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The number of cars has increased significantly in major cities. What problems does this cause and what are some solutions to these problems?

#cars #cities
There has been an argument that
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 should we use genetically modified
products
 or not? Some people discuss that we shouldn’t consume these
products
 because it’s not healthy. ,
Also
 it’s harmful to our environment, in the other hand some people claim that
GM
products
 Is great for our economy
although
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GM
 technology costs a lot of money it helps to grow and Produce more even bigger
products
. In some ,circumstances we can’t use genetically modified to make
products
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GM
 technology helps us to sell more and better quality
products
. I personally agree with all these concerns, I think it’s obvious that
GM
 crops have a lot of benefits But we must control the process and reduce the risks.
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  • Traffic congestion
  • Commute
  • Air pollution
  • Environmental degradation
  • Health issues
  • Road accidents
  • Vehicle density
  • Urban sprawl
  • Green spaces
  • Noise pollution
  • Public transportation
  • Non-motorized transport
  • Congestion charges
  • Traffic management
  • Carpooling
  • Electric/hybrid vehicles
  • Urban planning
  • Emissions
  • Cyclist lanes
  • Pedestrian zones
  • Infrastructure
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