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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measure could be taken to overcome these problems?

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In recent years, problems regarding
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quality
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 have become the most serious issue. There are certain
people
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, who are responsible for
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 situation,
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 few
people
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 suggested various
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 to handle
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 situations. The shortage of fresh
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 in different places is believed to be the consequence of some factors in the world.
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, there are
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 places, who
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 not have direct access to fresh and clean
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, even in the 21st century.
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, if we talk about India,
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 places of Kutch and Rajasthan, they face a lack of hygiene-related
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 and
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 of they suffer from different diseases.
People
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 might end up losing their lives every year.
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, corruption never leaves
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 a working space. Folks working in
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 purification compare does not serve the work fully to save some amount of money and
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 behaviour end up as harming to the health of consumers. Even after knowing
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 causes, few
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 do not have any interest but
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 consider the existing issues and comes up with measures to supply the
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freshwater water
.
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 and importantly, the government should pay more attention to remote areas and provide the accentual need of clean
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.
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, manufacturers should be supervised strongly by some agents of governments and should ensure the
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 of
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 by few
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quality
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 tastes. In conclusion,
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 some problems related to poor
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quality
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 are caused by different factors and becomes one of the dangerous situations, there are
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 of solutions
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 be taken to tackle
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 problems. Every country should be aware of the adverse effect of using poor and bad
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water
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.
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, they should have a plan to provide
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 resources to their own rular areas rather than giving attention to politics only.
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