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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #people #efforts #fight #climate #change
Some
people
 believe that
people
 should take steps
battling
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 against
the
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climate
change
,
however
, others argue that it is not their matter of concern and should leave as it is. I advocate that small
change
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 in human activities can save the earth from
bad
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the bad
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 energies of global warming. In
this
essay
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i
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 will discuss both views by analyzing how
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collective action of humans can bring big
change
, even though
the
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climate
change
 is a natural process. On the one hand,
although
 the
change
 in environmental weather making life difficult and
harming
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 in different ways; Many creatures are in
endangered
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the endangered
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 stage, few think that it is out of control and can not make any
change
.
As a result
, many creatures are in endanger stage.
Furthermore
, It is a part of natural
change
 and
prefereably
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preferably
 not
changeble
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changeable
.
Such
 as volcano, tsunami, earthquake these are natural calamities and happens as a part of its process
not
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 because of human activities, so it should be left as it is.
On the other hand
, many argue that
this
an
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 effect of luxurious living style and if the way of living is changed, it can be minimized.
Peple
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People
 can contribute their interest by requesting the government to make certain rules and
relurate
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relate
regulate
accordingly
,
suport
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support
 scientist and encourage them to research more on how to reduce the consequences of global warming, and
techonologist
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technologist
technologists
 to invent new technology, which can stop the bad effect at the
atmosphare
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atmosphere
.
Thus
,
people
 should take part in saving
earth
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the earth
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 from climate
change
. The Tesla car can be taken as
illustration
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an illustration
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, which is run by
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a battery
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battery
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batteries
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 that
do
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 not emit carbon gas . In conclusion,
although
action
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the action
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 of
people
 discharge little or no carbon gas
as
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comparision
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comparison
 to what amount natural disasters emit, it can be managed by human power since they are able to think innovatively and invent new technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy
  • afforestation
  • sustainable practices
  • extreme weather events
  • carbon emissions
  • infrastructure
  • agricultural practices
  • moral responsibility
  • ecosystems
  • green jobs
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • poverty alleviation
  • quality of life
  • proactive measures
  • balanced approach
  • green technology
  • unavoidable impacts
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