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Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?

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Many
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 as, old, handicapped and homeless
people
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 around us require our
support
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 in terms of money, shelter or daily household work, which can only be managed with the
support
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 of other human beings. Some have,
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, suggested the youth population for
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 purpose. In
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 essay, I will outline the perceived drawbacks of doing so, and explain why I feel that there are far more significant advantages. Community service by a person needs a lot of
time
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 and
support
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 from their family and workplace. Clearly, when
people
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 indulge themselves in these types of activities, it is a commitment and they have to spare
time
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 whatsoever is the situation and today's busy lifestyle does not permit it. Another aspect is balancing workplace life, family and helping
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.
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, they need specific attention towards them, as it is not possible for every youth to be at the same level.
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, helping behaviour will definitely bring out a better generation. Helping other in bad
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 will improve emotional quotient of the young generation and will make them a better human being.
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, due to
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, there will be enough
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 available, if every youth is ought to do volunteer jobs.
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, the problem of availability of the
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 staff will not be there and there will not be any
people
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 left without help. In conclusion, though community service requires
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 and management of relationships at work, home and help centres, it will result in improved
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 generation and a better world where all needs can be helped. In my view,
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 should be a continuous task and it should be made mandatory for younger ones due to its more advantages.
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