In some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is replacing cars. Why is this the case? Which development do you think is better?

Nowadays,
people
give up using bicycles and tend to
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us
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cars more
offen
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often

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in some states,
however
, in other states riding bikes is
becom
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become
becoming

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a
trand
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trend
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and
people
more
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likely to riding
this
tool than
vehical
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vehicle

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.
This
essay agrees with the
second
point is the better development and I am going to
explian
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explain

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why. There are several factors that use
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the bike
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bike
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bikes

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for commute is a great development.
Firse
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First
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of all, in some cities
people
more
care
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about their health,and indeed riding
bike
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a bike
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has
benefit
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a benefit

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for it ,
such
as improve lung
funtion
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function

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,
hart
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heart

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funtion
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and helps for lost weight,because
this
is a
full body
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movement when you riding a
bike
.
A recent
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research shows that a person who rides
bike
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a bike

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every day their
physcally
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physically
physical

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and
mentolly
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mentally

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are
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much healthier than a person who
drive
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a car for the most
communte
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commute
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in daily.
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, If you using a
bike
instead
of driving a
vehical
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vehicle

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it will
also
impeoved
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improve
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your
emotion
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happiness
,
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because when you do
execerise
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exercise

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your brain will relisess some
hormon
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hormones
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that make you feel happy. For the
enviromental
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environmental

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friendly reason, I have been us my
bike
a lot since
last
year and I felt my physical and mental health has been
enhand
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a lot.
Moreover
, in some cities
people
more
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concerned about
the
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grobal
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warming
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they
willing
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riding
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bicycal
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bicycle
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instead
for
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using a car to
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helpt
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the planet,because it can reduce the
carbond
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foot pint.
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pointed out that it could
reduced
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50
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of CO2
emiss
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miss
emission
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if
people
reduceed
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to use
a
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bike
insteat
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of driving a car. In conclusion, I
beleve
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believe

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that
people
choosing
bicyscals
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bicycles
bicycle

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insteat
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of cars is the best development as it can improve
oure
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our
are
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health and
environmental
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