In some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is replacing cars. Why is this the case? Which development do you think is better?

Nowadays,
people
give up using bicycles and tend to
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us
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cars more
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often
in some states,
however
, in other states riding bikes is
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become
becoming
a
trand
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trend
land
and
people
more
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likely to riding
this
tool than
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vehicle
.
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essay agrees with the
second
point is the better development and I am going to
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explain
why. There are several factors that use
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bike
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for commute is a great development.
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of all, in some cities
people
more
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about their health,and indeed riding
bike
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a bike
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has
benefit
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for it ,
such
as improve lung
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function
,
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funtion
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function
and helps for lost weight,because
this
is a
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movement when you riding a
bike
.
A recent
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research shows that a person who rides
bike
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every day their
physcally
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physically
physical
and
mentolly
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mentally
are
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much healthier than a person who
drive
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a car for the most
communte
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commute
common
in daily.
In addition
, If you using a
bike
instead
of driving a
vehical
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vehicle
it will
also
impeoved
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improve
improved
your
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happiness
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because when you do
execerise
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exercise
your brain will relisess some
hormon
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hormones
hormone
that make you feel happy. For the
enviromental
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environmental
friendly reason, I have been us my
bike
a lot since
last
year and I felt my physical and mental health has been
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enhanced
a lot.
Moreover
, in some cities
people
more
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concerned about
the
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grobal
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global
warming
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therefore
they
willing
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riding
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bicycal
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bicycle
bicycles
instead
for
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using a car to
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helpt
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the planet,because it can reduce the
carbond
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carbon
foot pint.
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, the
sciensitis
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scientists
pointed out that it could
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50
percent
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of CO2
emiss
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miss
emission
remiss
if
people
reduceed
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reduced
to use
a
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bike
insteat
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instead
of driving a car. In conclusion, I
beleve
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believe
that
people
choosing
bicyscals
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bicycles
bicycle
insteat
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instead
of cars is the best development as it can improve
oure
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our
are
your
health and
environmental
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friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sprawling urban areas
  • infrastructure
  • carbon footprints
  • dedicated bike lanes
  • bike-sharing programs
  • compact urban design
  • sustainable
  • pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • livable
  • physical activity
  • reducing stress levels
  • alleviated
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