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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by few people that
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 large amount of money is extremely crucial when it comes to purchasing
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any items or services. In my opinion, I strongly disagree that the
price
 matters. The purchase of anything must not only be within the available budget in order to avoid any debt
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 but
also
 the necessity and quality must
also
 be taken into consideration.
However
, there are some contrary cases like medical treatments where
price
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 is not the governing factor.
To begin
 with, whenever we decide to purchase any item, it is very important to ask a question to
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, "
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It
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it
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 really necessary to buy it now? ". Most of the time, we are all tempted to buy new luxury items due to
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advertisements or simply due to social pressure. Later, if at all we decide to go ahead with the plan we should always make sure that it is within our budget. These days due to the easy access of credit cards, people purchase these products
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 and by the time they realize, they would have slipped into
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debt. A recent study showed that over 70% of the debt arises due to over expenditure.
Last
 but not the least, the quality of the product should match the
price
that is
 being paid for.
On the other hand
, there are certain scenarios where the
price
 is irrelevant, particularly when someone's life depends on it.
For instance
, when a person is undergoing a medical treatment that cannot be cured under normal channels,
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 is redundant.
However
, these are very rare circumstances. In conclusion, the sum of money for any product is never a leading factor but it should be the budget, quality and dire necessity which must be kept in mind except few cases involving health.
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