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It is often claimed that wealthy nations should provide financial support to poorer countries for welfare, health, and education. However, there are those who believe that it is the responsibility of developing nations to provide these services. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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it is considered by some think that the developed
states
 ought to contribute financial aid to underprivileged nations for well-being. While others say that developing society are provided well-being services to poorer societies.
This
 essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
To begin
 with, the
third
 level region have more financial resources than underdeveloped
states
, those countries should be provided money resources to poorer
states
 for welfare, health and education.
For instance
, underdeveloped tribes ought to invest and start a business in those countries,
as a result
,
this
 type of territory can be developed, more and more youngsters will be gotten employment opportunities.
In addition
, it is like a win-win policy,
this
 means, underdeveloped territories always welcome wealthy regions to start a business, under-privileged
unions
 give tax-free who developed
unions
.
On the other hand
,
second
-level
states
 have a responsibility to provide aid facilities
such
 as education professionals sent to poorer
unions
, they will be worked in universities, production companies,
as a result
, the professionals can be taught a better scholar to those territories.
For instance
, people from India are offering services to
third
 level nations
such
 as medical needs, education aids. To conclude, the developed community should be contributed financial assistance to privileged
states
 in order to they would be consumed basic needs, developing democracy should contribute to those services to poorer
unions
. In my opinion, about
this
, wealthy
states
 ought to provide financial assistance to underprivileged territories. I recommend poorer communities should not be expected any money aid to any other nations,
this
 means, they should be improved themself.
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