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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #customs #behaviour #host #country #differences
When it comes
dealing
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 with
people
 from other
countries
 or
region
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regions
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, two
type
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 of opinions exist. Some
people
 strongly believe that
visitors
 should follow the local
customs
 and
behavior
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behaviour
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. Others believe that the
host
countries
 should not be rigid and welcome
visitors
 to practice their own
culture
. I strongly agree that
visitors
 should be allowed to follow their own
culture
 without interfering with
host
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the host
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culture
. It has been observed that
people
 who are emotionally attached to traditional values expect others to follow the same practices whether it be religion,
customs
, language or festivals. There is no denying that
majority
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 of tourists visit a country because of its local practices which are new to them. If
visitors
 follow local traditions, it will be easier for them to be comfortable dealing with indigenous communities.
Secondly
, if the
visitors
 are aware
about
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 the local likes and dislikes, it will avoid creating situations
which
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that
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 lead to conflicts. If more
people
 will accept local values, it will increase the strength of the
host
 country. But when it comes to tourists, they prefer to visit
countries
which
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that
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 are flexible, liberal and free from any sort of expectations by the local community. If the local community is ready to welcome new
customs
, they will
also
 benefit from the open trade and communication which in turn will boost the economy.
Also
, it will enhance the diversity and enrich the local
customs
. It can even open ways for political and diplomatic relations between different governments.
Countries
 like
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 of America and Canada have welcomed
people
 from all over the world with different
background
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backgrounds
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,
culture
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cultures
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,
religion
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religions
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 and ideologies and are the most developed
countries
 in industry, trade and tourism. I support
people
 who think the
visitors
 bring new ideas, values and
culture
 as an addition to the local communities.
This
 ultimately allows the
host
 country to become part of
global
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the global
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 village.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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