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The popularity of dead languages such as Latin and ancient Greek in schools is declining, as many people consider their study to be a waste of time and funding. How does the study of dead languages add to academic and personal development? Why might some people feel that funds could be better allocated?

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Several famous dead
languages
such
 as Latin and ancient Greek in school programs spend less time year by year, the reason for circumstance individuals suppose to learn their
languages
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 dead
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academic and personal skills, and suggestions that these funds should be spent in another area. Learning an ancient
language
 can improve memory and social communication. The scientists claimed that
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diminished risk of dementia.
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 struggle
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 diseases. Some modern
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construct from dead
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 current Kazakh
language
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 Ancient Turks
languages
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 one old
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 can understand plenty of other
languages
 and cultures. “Since the
language
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 recommend others stop pay money for developing
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languages
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