Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family . Do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job?What other factors should be considered?
It comfortable working
is opine
by some Change the verb form
is opined
people
that their
should be based on wages, in order to give security for their family. Replace the word
there
Although
, wealth is necessary to complete basic needs, yet comfortable environment
and job satisfaction are
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are also mattered
also
matter of concern while they are choosing job
.
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a job
To begin
with, adequate remuneration is necessary for survival. Firstly
, if employees have good
pay scale Correct article usage
a good
then
they can provide luxurious
lifestyle to family members, so many Add an article
a luxurious
people
look for pay while searching work
. Change preposition
for work
Secondly
, in order to give proper education to children so that they can have secure
future, Correct article usage
a secure
people
are doing well Paid
jobs. Add a hyphen
well-Paid
In addition
to this
, to fulfill
the basic requirements of Change the spelling
fulfil
family
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the family
a family
such
as shelter, food, clothes, so that they can stay comfortable in life, it is possible only if they are earning well.
Other components are also
mandatory when person
is selecting Add an article
a person
the person
occupation
. Primarily, colleagues relationships, if employees have good interpersonal relationships at Add an article
an occupation
work place
, they can easily seek help from coworkers to complete their task ,which leads to less burden on Correct your spelling
workplace
single
employee. Secondarily,Add an article
a single
Correct article usage
a
environment
is also
important factors
for workers, in order to stay free from stress proper working Fix the agreement mistake
factor
environment
is necessary such
as adequate lighting, space and privacy. Also
, many people
pay attention to working hours instead
of only monetary, so that they can spend Quality time with family and friends .
To conclude, although
sufficient income is main
motive of every employee for Add an article
the main
security
of their family; Add an article
the security
however
others
factors are Correct quantifier usage
other
also
equally important like,
comfortable working Remove the comma
apply
environment
and hours.Submitted by Sohandeepkaur9327 on
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