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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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It is undeniable that the goal of
country
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 improvement in every region is to increase goods and materials
production
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. From my point of view, I disagree with
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 viewpoint for many reasons due to I think that the aim of the area improvement should start at the populations rather than the
production
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. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, many
people
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 think that increasing of the manufacture can affect their
country
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 in terms the economical systems, and there can affect the well-being of
people
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.
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, if their nation has increased
the goods
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the production of the goods
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production
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 of each industry, they will have more national income.
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, more manufacturing of many factories can raise the proportion of employment in their citizens,
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, the populations can have an appropriate life.
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, some
people
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, including me, believe that the objective of these evolutions of every
country
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 should focus on
livelihood
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the livelihood
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 of their citizens rather than increasing line construction. In my opinion, I think that the government should have some goals in terms of improving education rather than improving industries,
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, establishing a fund for underprivileged children to receive free school, due to
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 rising of goods creation is a good way for these evolutions, if
people
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 in their
country
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 do not have a good knowledge to use the resources in their region, more
production
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 will be useless as well. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
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 idea because the development in phases of education in each area is not only supporting their populations but
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 is creating many efficient labours into markets of the industries.
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, it is recommended that the state union should take action on creating knowledge rather than increasing construction.
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