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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crimes drams are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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Now a days
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people
 have a contentious argument over the popularity rise of crime novels and TV serials. The public
have
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 their own justification
why
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for why
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this
type
 of drama lead an important role in their
life
however
 I would like to emphasize my personal notion about the sudden inclination of popularity among the spectators. And how
this
affect
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 our
life
. The main motivation of
this
type
 of fiction
stories
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story
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are
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 to attract the mindset of
people
 and create an interest among them on top of
this
type
 of storyline and supply board we imagine.
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instance
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 a suspense thriller 108 fiction mostly and with the death of
villain
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a villain
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 or a failure of
negative
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a negative
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 character in that feeling the fascinating
think
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thing
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 about
this
 is it always become a discussion topic among and youngsters. even though
this
 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact
of
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on
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 watching
this
type
 of movies but
also
this
 is
a
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good entertainment for the subscribers obvious today we get in numerous channels at the cheaper rate so everyone
are
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is
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 busy with different programs in some areas we can save
beting
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being
betting
 system about the climate of these serious it is very interesting to watch these peoples are divided among groups and they will predict how
this
 story going to end was probably
this
 will end in a big concrete among them.
other
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 side of
people
think
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 that
this
 will create a negative mindset among the
people
 and
this
 will lead to increase in criminal activity my opinion is that
this
 is purely for entertainment purpose mostly the stories are based on true human
life
 which should be extracted from a large group of
people
 so
this
 can help us to think deeply and 8 to solve our complex problem in our daily
life
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for example
 we have a similar problem that seen in movies all serials which occurred in our
life
 we don't get panic because
this
 situation is familiar to us in conclusion we cannot make an end to
this crime movies
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this crime movie
these crime movies
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 or TV programs by thinking the negative impact of
this
 generous. It is
it is
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a matter of how we accept
this
 in a positive manner in
the
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life
.
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