Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Globally, the suitable

ages

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age

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for getting

retirement

after devoting their life to working is approximately 65

years

old. Someones believe that it is unfair for some particular

jobs

to get retired at

this

age, which

those occupation

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that occupation

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should be retired earlier than 65

years

old, and should

recieve

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receive

enormous budgets for a

retirement

. In

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essay, I will explore the sample of the occupations being

benefit

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for the earlier

retirement

, which I absolutely admit with

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statement.

Firstly

, the specific

jobs

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job

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that get the advantages in setting an earlier

retirement

is a petroleum engineer. As it is involved in a very high

risk

, the old workers, who have a default physically cannot properly work relative to youngsters.

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, according to the human resource data from

Thai

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Petroleum organization, 90 % of the

workers

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age working at oil rig station is less than 50

years

old.

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,

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huge amount of salary should be paid for the high

risk

oriented careers for the

risk

that they suffer.

Moreover

, there are other

type

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of

jobs

which need to be retired at the early stages including

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actors and air

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hostages

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because these have to use their

apparance

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appearance

for working. To illustrate

this

, women and men age more than 35

years

old will become old, and they are not beautiful and smart as the teenagers, the airline and entertainment companies prefer to recruit

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younger ones, who are more delightful, and gorgeous compared to the old one. Due to

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period of working,

this

particular

cares

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always receive tremendous salaries compared to ordinary

jobs

such

as

officemen

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office

. In conclusion,

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are various careers, which the

retirement

should not

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on the ages including the

jobs

, which involved a high

risk

as a petroleum engineer

,

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and having

short

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period of work as an actor. For

this

reason, they deserve substantial money to subsidize as the aforementioned reasons.