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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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The diagram illustrates the natural process with different stages in the life cycle of a
frog
,an amphibian. Overall, it is apparent that there are seven distinct stages in
this
 life cycle,starting with the eggs and ending with the development of adult frogs.
Initially
,the female
frog
subsequently
 lays numerous eggs called frogspawn on the water.
Moreover
,
this
 frogspawn hatch from the egg and little tadpoles come out of it and cling to plants that grow in the water.
Then
, the size of the tadpoles become bigger and there is a formation of front legs in
this
 stage.Gradually, the tadpole now has developed into a shape of a
frog
 ,pulmonary breathing
commencesalso
Correct your spelling
commences also
 commence in
this
 stage. In the
next
 stage, the tadpole has changed into a young
frog
 with a shorter tail and the arms and legs can be seen.Once
this
 young
frog
 grows into a mature
frog
, there is no tail and the limbs are fully developed and ready to leave the water.
Finally
,the cycle continues again starting from eggs by
female
Correct article usage
a female
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frog
 lays an egg on the ground.
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