After leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

At present competitive world employment is one of the toughest things for youngsters. Because of count between the work availability and passed out students is very contrary. It is agreed that youngsters should select the race path which they respect higher than large pay scale profession. That would be made a better race path for our successful future.
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they do not know the complication and risks in the task when they are new for employment. At that point in time, dedication is highly required for them to shine in their roles. If they do not have emotion for their career that would drastically lead to black marks for them.
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I have paid INR 6000/-, when my college friends are getting paid around INR 30000 to 40000/-. Because of devotion in my ,
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core I have continued my path.
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I am earning 10 to 15% higher than them.
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, comparing the recent year’s post availability with the requirement
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very contrast. In
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case, if anyone waits till getting a high salary work that would lead them to complete a break between the completion of education and initiation of a career.
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, that might impact their future.
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each year around 4 to 4.5 lakhs of students are passed outing college and are ready to start their trade. Though, the available task is averagely 1 to 1.2 lakhs. To conclude, considering the above concerns choosing of assignment which they appreciate is always better than a high salaried place.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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