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What are the personalities of people whose job is to give advice to others?

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They are usually
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good listeners. When they engage in conversation, they make
people
 ‘feel’ heard. They feel that someone really understands their wants, needs and desires. And
people
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 advice to others are open-minded, unselfish, and willing. I find strangers can be more unbiased and in many cases probably more knowledgeable. They don’t prejudge you.
People
 you know
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maybe
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 biased in their answers,
however
maybe
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 more helpful because they know what you are like to a certain level. It varies from situation to situation. In terms of life-changing decisions,
counselors
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 should organize their thoughts and weigh all the pros and cons ahead of time they give advice.
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, dealing with trivial matters or day to day activities,
people
 can whip out any sound advice, as they intended to be spontaneous.
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