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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ while true work of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, human's taste in artwork has been declining which leads to the consideration of ordinal art as a masterpiece. Unfortunately, the real artworks have not been recognized and depreciated by the death of "True art lovers". There are two main reasons to explain
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